IELTS эссе пример: Looking Younger

Разберем на примере, как писать IELTS эссе “Looking Younger”.

People try to look younger than they really are. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Шаг 1: Introduction

после перефразированная задания отвечаем прямо на вопрос эссе Is it a positive or a negative trend? и презентуем причину “What are the reasons for this?” :

Today, many devote considerable effort to look younger. The underlying cause of the tendency is beauty ideals that are spread through social media platforms, which, in my opinion, are detrimental as they can arouse anxiety in those pursuing a young look. 

Шаг 2: Body Paragraph 1

презентуем первый аргумент – причину “a concept of beauty” в первом предложении параграфа + развиваем аргумент вглубь в 2-3 supporting sentences:

A major reason for trying to look younger is a concept of beauty constantly being recycled in social media and advertising. A repetitive narrative seen on every other page of fashion magazines implies that to look young means to be not only successful and beautiful, but also accepted and approved by society. The idea starts to seep into girls’ minds at the very young age and haunts them throughout the rest of their lives, and under the pressure young adults are programmed to believe that looking their own age is unacceptable in society. 

Шаг 3: Body Paragraph 2

презентуем второй аргумент “harmful to one’s mental health” в первом предложении параграфа + развиваем аргумент вглубь в 2-3 supporting sentences:

Excessive focusing on the very idea that a person should look young for the rest of their life and setting this as the ultimate goal might be harmful to one’s mental health, causing anxiety. The continuous search for new products with anti-aging components and plastic surgery procedures is pointless as an appearance that does not correspond to one’s age is impossible to achieve. Thus, the efforts might decline self-esteem, bringing dissatisfaction with appearance, an increased anxiety level, and even such psychological disorders, dysmorphophobia. 

Шаг 4: Conclusion

дублируем мнение “negative effect ” в заключении + суммируем оба аргумента:

In conclusion, a person’s constant desire to look younger might be enforced by the content on social media platforms and in magazines and eventually have a profoundly negative effect on mental health and the anxiety level in particular.

 

В итоге, получаем такое эссе (Band 7-7.5):

People try to look younger than they really are. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Today, many devote considerable effort to look younger. The underlying cause of the tendency is beauty ideals that are spread through social media platforms, which, in my opinion, are unfavorable and even detrimental as they can arouse anxiety in those pursuing a young look. 

A major reason for trying to look younger is a concept of beauty constantly being recycled in social media and advertising. A repetitive narrative seen on every other page of fashion magazines implies that to look young means to be not only successful and beautiful, but also accepted and approved by society. The idea starts to seep into girls’ minds at the very young age and haunts them throughout the rest of their lives, and under the pressure young adults are programmed to believe that looking their own age is unacceptable in society. 

Excessive focusing on the very idea that a person should look young for the rest of their life and setting this as the ultimate goal might be harmful to one’s mental health, causing anxiety. The continuous search for new products with anti-aging components and plastic surgery procedures is pointless as an appearance that does not correspond to one’s age is impossible to achieve. Thus, the efforts might decline self-esteem, bringing dissatisfaction with appearance, an increased anxiety level, and even such psychological disorders, dysmorphophobia. 

In conclusion, a person’s constant desire to look younger might be enforced by the content on social media platforms and in magazines and eventually have a profoundly negative effect on mental health and the anxiety level in particular.

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