Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success, while others believe that there are other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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There are those who believe that it is mainly economic success that contributes to happiness, while others believe that it is not just about economic factors and the level of happiness might depend on other aspects. From my perspective, it is true that not only money defines happiness and there are some other factors such as social relationships or temperament, which influence how happy one is.
On the one hand, wealth correlates with happiness and it is difficult to be happy without money and basic conveniences it brings. Income that moves some out of poverty or improves others’ standard of living contributes to a person’s happiness, changing their lives for the better. Hence, it is economic success that ensures not only covering basic needs such as shelter and food, but also enhances life in more sophisticated ways, such as providing access to luxurious goods.
However, money alone cannot make those who do not have fulfilling social relationships happy. It is strong social relationships and social integration that are one of the key ingredients of happiness. This is because humanы are social creatures that need connections and a feeling of belonging to their community. Without positive relationships with relatives and friends, they cannot feel satisfied with their being, however rich they are.
In conclusion, although it is important to have economic success and the benefits it brings to be happy, I think that solely financial well-being is not enough. Personal happiness also depends on social integration and the quality of one’s relationships.
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