IELTS Agree or Disagree Essay: GENDERS EQUALITY

Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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Шаг первый: после перефразированная формулируем наше мнение + 2 аргумента почему:

Equality of rights between genders has been a summon in all countries for several decades already. However, women are not equally presented in certain positions, especially high-level. I firmly disagree with the point of view that the hiring process should be adjusted in that way to provide certain jobs to women. Firstly, this essay will cover the reasons why the disproportion of genders on certain positions occurs, and secondly, will discuss ethical and economic issues arising from such regulation.

Шаг 2: поясняем первый аргумент + пример для подкрепления вашей позиции

The primary reason why women are represented unequally in different sectors of the world economy has a natural background such as the difference in anatomy and different vocations. Rarely do feminists mention that women have historically been good at jobs that require much empathy and caregiving that is why they are a dominant gender in nursing, teaching and looking after children and elderly people. On no account should the importance of women’s individual choices be neglected as many women willingly choose family lives rather than stressful and uncompromised business lives.

Шаг 3: поясняем второй аргумент +пример для подкрепления вашей позиции:

Another point to consider is related to the consequences of regulating the hiring process in order to fill as many positions as possible with women. This will result in huge inefficiency and biased attitude to women as many of them will not fit their positions. If it were not for free competency among employees, many enterprises would struggle from incompetent management who were hired using political criteria rather than personal qualities. By imposing gender roles, government hurts women after all.

Шаг 4: дублируем мнение в заключении + суммируем оба аргумента:

In conclusion, summing up the stated above, I strongly oppose the idea of implementing forced practices of hiring women on certain high-level positions. It is high time the feminists asked women why they have made their voluntary choice and focused on something else.